Tuesday, June 19, 2012

ever since


Your time stopped
at twelve minutes past twelve
.
Mine keeps losing
missing things 
ever since
.
I find first that and  then this
only thank thee
.
and I wink at your
now eternal smile
ever since






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29 comments:

  1. always hard when we lose someone...and with him or her bits and pieces of ourselves..but good when we can look back and realize we still see...more..

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    1. Thanks Claudia for your beautiful comment, and YES I can see so much more.

      BTW Still unable to get to commenting in your blog-- I'll try through FB if I cannot!

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  2. mmm...felt...the loss of someone...and them taking bits of us with them...each touch we give a bit of ourselves away...i like the smile in the end as well as you look back and still see the face...

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    1. mmm... my dear Brian... no concious reference to any bits here... real things,instead, which disappear and turn up because of him I can bet.
      :-)

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  3. love the first stanzas...they lead you on....and on...bkm

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  4. There's a sense of wandering, of searching, and some very musical language here Dulce. It's always good to be able to wink at the end.

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  5. I feel acceptance in this...a coming to terms.

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  6. And don't you know this Dulce?
    You are here
    He is there
    difference being
    'there' is everywhere

    I love you wrote
    “Your time stopped at...”
    because
    Eternity has no 'time'.
    Right?--grin!

    Poetry is music in words
    your lyrics are heartfelt.
    ever since...
    12:12

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  7. Sad to lose someone...lose a part of ourselves.
    Sorry Dulce.

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  8. Beautiful and wistful and strong. Thanks.

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  9. 12:12 and other numbers that repeat everywhere I look, many of them repeating. I love the metre of this piece.

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  10. This had me take pause, remembering some of those whose time stopped. Each left me in someway losing something, usually small.

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  11. This touched me deeply. My mother passed away a little over two months ago. I'm just beginning to smile. Thanks for this beautiful poem.

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  12. great seeing that you linked this up with dVerse...enjoyed the second read...and rgd. the commenting..sometimes wordpress is a diva..but no sweat...smiles

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  13. The detail of citing the exact time brought this poem to life right away. I feel the very subtle nuances of both loss and gratitude for having loved someone.

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  14. You captured that feeling of loss and being lost perfectly. Very nicely done.

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  15. So there is a guest, I see, taking and returning things so that you notice, grinning at your wink--since 12/12--a personal loss?--such a friendly and loving and a bit mischievous presence of love. Finely honed out of short syllables. Brilliant, as in full of Light.

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  16. Posted twice
    How nice!

    because I did wish to say, I also have
    a Peep-relative who passed into the next.
    She helps me at the oddest times, to
    find something lost. Or discover something
    I had, but had misplaced.

    The image you posted is awesome, inspiring!
    Thank you again!

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  17. I love the repetition of "ever since"...it really works! The accompanying image is fantastic!

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  18. I remember time stopping! It haunts, but there are moments united! Your poem is stunning and enchants the hope of feeling one's presence. I have sensed things from those who have gone ahead...Well Done

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  19. The first two stanzas: shatteringly beautiful. I shall emeber them for a long time to come.

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  20. The opening lines got me....I think time stops in our minds ~

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  21. You have captured the disorientation of loss very well indeed. Thank you for sharing on Real Toads.

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  22. From the first 'ever since' through the final line, I felt the pain, the loss. It was 10:40 for my mother. Lovely writing.

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  23. Loss is so painful...but that smile is hope

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  24. i'm sorry for your loss. hope you can smooth out your life soon.

    bonus track

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  25. Grief is so hard; and there are so many memories. We have to remember them though, and that smile. But we can't help but remember the stopping of time as well. I empathize with your write.

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